Yo Ash, great sculpt. I think this is your best yet. A very nice overall gesture, and a lovely portrait. I really like the work in the upper back too, and her left scapula/serratus.
In terms of feedback, the main thing that stands out to me is that I'm not convinced about the weight of the pose, to me that's hurting the gesture. If you drop a plum line down from the pit of the neck, you'll generally find that it lines up with the inside bony point of the ankle, at least when the model has most of their weight on one leg, as she would have here. That means that the standing leg needs to shift inwards a bit (I've ghosted the original position on the picture). Always look out for the diagonal movement of a weight bearing leg - the further that you can push that angle, the more movement you're going to get in the pose, and the more feeling of weight.
That leg bearing the weight is also going to push the hip up, and with the opposing arm raised like it is here, that will give us a contrapposto (hips and ribcage following different angles). I like the angle of the shoulders, but I think you want to find the angle of the hips more.
With that arm raised, I would also expect the left boob to get pulled up and stretched out with it. They both feel very similar at the moment.
That small dot at the bottom of the ribcage is just a reminder - when the model is in a nice stretched position like that, odds are you'll be able to find the bottom of the ribcage. If you can, then do, bony landmarks are always going to help you a lot.
From the side view (both side views work very well btw), I've just indicated a way to find a bit more rhythm in the transition from the side boob to the armpit.
Finally, I know it's obvious, but having the feet so small and wrist so thin isn't doing the sculpt any favours. I know you haven't really worked them, but the level you've taken everything else too is now getting held back by those areas. By all means leave them unfinished, but at least make sure the proportions and rhythms are a bit closer, so they don't draw attention to themselves and hurt the rest of the sculpt - from the front view, she looks like she has a kind of Chinese bound foot.
Anyway, great stuff, the improvement over your first sculpts is very noticeable.
Sup Chris,
ReplyDeleteMate that is great feedback, I'm definitely hearing it. I was thinking about the weight distribution although I did find myself 'chasing' the shifting weight.
Having said that yeah the gesture of the pose was lost.
The hips I wasn't totally happy with, the model was very curvaceous and I think in my sculpt they should be a bit wider as well as indicating the contrapposto more as you said.
As for the boobs I'm not quite sure how to be a gentleman at the same time as describing their 'weight' however I know what you mean, as it stems from the initial pose which lacks a sense of structure, the leg angle.
Also I agree the rib cage needs to end earlier and under the right arm is weird.
I did find myself letting go of formula and just enjoying finding the forms, but in an isolated lazy way to some extent.
As for the hands and feet ummm yeah I know it is something I should cover earlier into the sculpt :-)
I'll incorporate your comments and post the results. There are a couple of other things I see now that I want to tweak too.
Thanks for the feedback and nice words, I did focus on the shoulders and profile so its good to hear I am improving. These sessions have really helped.
Cheers dude